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Tuesday, 12 November 2013

Firework argument

We should be allowed to play with fireworks because it's fun for the whole family and plus they're bright and colourful. They're as shinny as a lightbulb.  We only have fireworks once a year so get out there and have some fun. Fireworks is just like having a mouthful of a  lollypop that explodes in your mouth once a year ONLY ONCE. You would  be looking forward to that don't you want to go outside and have some fun  and watch some pretty lights in the sky. I know that fireworks are expensive but it is worth it. Fireworks reminds me of my old memories. Fireworks aren't that bad it is not like its gonna hurt you. If your neighbours hate you then invite them over for a firework party and bring food to make your neighbours like you more if you don't they will hate you more. Fireworks is my reason of staying up late!!! Staying up late can make you cranky but who cares we are crazy kiwis and that is who we are CRAZY KIWIS.      

                          By kaia

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3 comments:

  1. aloud (shouting) - allowed (permission) :-)
    its - it's
    light bulb we - lightbulb we - one word / delete the space between lightbulb and we.
    Fireworks is just- Fireworks ARE ... is = ONE are = MANY
    of a lolly pop - delete the space between 'a and lollypop'

    Make these changes, check with a buddy, and then come back to me for another Teacher conference.

    Mr Pouniu

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  2. its - it is - it's : make the change
    URGH- make the changes ABOVE...

    Mr P

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  3. You would ( )be looking forward to that() don't you want to go outside and have some fun( ) and watch some pretty lights in the sky.

    If your neighbours hate you then invite them over for a firework party and bring food to make your neighbours like you more if you don't they will hate you more.
    This last sentence needs changes...

    Make these changes.

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yello you must love oreos!!! :)